I'm taking down the story that was published here, because I hope to include it in a collection of short stories.
I am not deleting the post entirely because I had some lovely comments that I selfishly want to keep.
Apologies if this isn't the post you were expecting.
Annalisa
This is amazing Annalisa! I thought the narrator was male at first, I don't know if that was intentional or not, and I love how at first you just refer to Mark as a 'shape'.
ReplyDeleteDo you know what, I really loved this Annalisa. The problem was though, I wanted more. I want to know about her childhood and how it shaped her, I wanted to know about Mark and how they ended up there at that point and I wondered where Amy was if she wasn't there. Was she dead and the narrator trying to move on? Had they split and the narrator still feels guilty or were they not living together and the narrator simply cheating?
ReplyDeleteI'd love to read something like this as a novel. There's so much there. So many emotions, tangled lives, hopes, dreams and fears. It would be great to see it lengthened out.
Brilliant!
Thank you both for your comments, and your praise.
ReplyDeleteJenny - yes, it was intentional. At first I wrote it with a traditional twist-in-the-tale in mind, but the reveal came too early. Instead I just wrote it as thought the reader knew it was a woman talking.
Rebecca - therein lies the reason why I love short stories so much. I love the impact they have, but without all the backstory which I find makes my writing very dull and mundane (other people do it so much better than me, novelists mainly!) I'm really glad this story gave you so many questions.
I like this a lot. I really enjoyed the characters voice and it was an interesting story with glimpses into both the past and the future.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kate :-)
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