If you haven't seen this meme yet, you track down the first mention of the word 'look' in your WIP and then post the paragraph(s) surrounding it. Please bear in mind that this is exactly as I wrote it on 1st November (I haven't yet started re-writing it) although I'm pretty sure that even though these are currently the first two paragraphs, they won't be soon!
One
moment The Sea View Hotel was standing proud on Grand Parade, dominating the
sky line, alongside a terrace of similar buildings; the next, one whole side
had blasted out across the promenade. The huge explosion was heard several
miles, several towns, away.
At
first, no one moved. There were small groups of people just looking up at the
space left behind. The rubble created a cloud of dust. Someone somewhere
shouted “Fire!” and that’s what got people moving. They ran forward, then ran
away when a secondary explosion from somewhere deep inside the building made
the walls shake.
And now I'm going to tag some people - I don't always tag forward, because it's so hard to choose, but I love Allison's sub-clause of using the NaNo project that I'm going to stipulate the same thing.
Excellent snippet! I will try and remember to do mine soon - but it's Alex-fest today LOL!
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to it lol
DeleteThat's certainly a dramatic opening.
ReplyDeleteI've started rewriting, and it's now on page 3, hopefully it's still dramatic though.
DeleteSweet! Thanks for thinking of me! I use 'look' way too much, so this is going to be fun, lol! I like your snippet, very cool visual :)
ReplyDeleteThanks. I'll keep an eye out for your snippet!
DeleteGripping passage-- great read!
ReplyDeleteThanks Julie :-)
DeleteThat's a nice piece and only one "looking" is quite good:)
ReplyDeleteI've actually just rewritten that part and added in another 'look' - it'll have to go :-)
DeleteBOOM!!!! Very nice. :)
ReplyDeleteThe word BOOM appears quite a lot through this novel - I gave up my thesaurus for NaNo because it was slowing me down!
DeleteLove it! Hmm, wonder what caused the blast!
ReplyDeleteSo do I - I haven't figured that part out yet!
DeleteGreat excerpt, Annalisa, very intriguing!
ReplyDeleteThanks Suzanne!
DeleteExplosions! Very tense.
ReplyDeleteI hope so, for a little while at least :-)
DeleteOOh, I like explosions! I also think it's very brave to share something from NaNo, so thank you :)
ReplyDeleteBrave/stupid, they're both the same in my book these days :-D
DeleteWhat a wonderful idea for a meme.
ReplyDeleteLove your excerpt. Your words definitely transported me into the scene and I really want to know what happens next and why the explosions happened in the first place.
Thanks Misha :-)
DeleteI love your excerpt! Definitely makes me want to keep reading.
ReplyDeleteThanks for tagging me, using the NaNo project is a great idea. :)
Thanks Julie. I'm looking forward to reading yours.
Deletefun snippet and good writing. I'm enjoying your post NaNo adventures as much as the November tension. Have fun with all of it.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad I came up with something that I can carry on working on over the winter, which was my cunning plan!
DeleteFantastic snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks Christine :-)
DeleteAWWW! Now I want to know what happened after the second explosion. You like teasing us. Great job Annalisa!
ReplyDeleteThanks. I hope I can make the rest of the story just as good!
DeleteOoh, thanks for the teasing excerpt! Didn't one famous author say something like "When in doubt over what to write, blow something up"? :P
ReplyDeleteI love that! And I vow to blow lots more things up :-)
DeleteGreat start to your Nano novel. What does 'meme' mean?
ReplyDeleteThanks Lizy. I had to google the answer to your question: to paraphrase, it's a thing that spreads around the internet - like a bloghop. See, it's totally clear now, isn't it?? :-)
DeleteInteresting and scary using the NaNo project!
ReplyDeleteYour teaser makes the rest of the novel sound like it could be extremely interesting. :)
Very scary :-) I hope it will be interesting...
DeleteDefinitely loved the excerpt. Just reading left me wanting to know more about this situation! Happy Holidays!
ReplyDeleteThanks Gossip Girl :-)
DeleteI'm intrigued! I'd love to read more.
ReplyDeleteI'm writing as fast as I can, I can't believe how much of a mess it is - it seemed to flow so well last month lol
DeleteGreat example of 'look'ing. I can just imagine being there.
ReplyDeleteThanks Francene :-)
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